Comments on: Happy Ending # fridayflash

By: Laurita

Laurita — Wed, 21 Oct 2009 10:57:23 +0000

Fantastic imagery. You always create such lively and vivid pieces. Now I want one of those big lollipops.

By: mazzz_in_Leeds

mazzz_in_Leeds — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 08:26:45 +0000

little typo: “rope dazzling rope dazzling”

Lovely imagery as others have said, and a very nice picture of what dying by natural causes might be like…. i hope! Otherwise it’s time I started smoking again

By: Rosa Say

Rosa Say — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 07:52:16 +0000

Your title had me wishing Trev, but can’t say I was disappointed. This part filled me with instant foreboding: “he saw nothing but the purest, impenetrable black. Not only saw it, but felt it; that sense of the void, of emptiness on a large scale. This was what the whole experiment was about.” yet he *was* happy.

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 02:41:15 +0000

The ending works well. A nice switch in pace and perspective, and the dialogue drives it home.

By: Marisa Birns

Marisa Birns — Fri, 16 Oct 2009 22:43:38 +0000

What imagery!

Nobody dies smiling? LOL!

Well done.

By: Barry J. Northern

Barry J. Northern — Fri, 16 Oct 2009 22:24:01 +0000

At least he died a colourful death. You’re great a describing completely abstract imagery, something I’ve wrestled with in the past when trying to describe the type of thing that comes out of wizard’s fingers.

By: Laura Eno

Laura Eno — Fri, 16 Oct 2009 16:33:43 +0000

And he’s still out there somewhere, smiling. Great descriptions!

By: Michael J. Solender

Michael J. Solender — Fri, 16 Oct 2009 15:24:58 +0000

Horst, oh man, should picked someone more trust worthy! Fluid and flowing, a gem of a tale!

By: Chance

Chance — Fri, 16 Oct 2009 14:37:09 +0000

Intriguing ending, and like Lindas comment. Super imagery

By: Linda

Linda — Fri, 16 Oct 2009 13:37:43 +0000

I want to go like that… super imagery, Trev. Subtle ending, which I prefer. You are my go-to sci-fi writer, just the right blend of elegance and rigor. Peace, linda